My Curse

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I am your sunshine,
I am your rain,
better forget me,
I only bring pain.

Once you were happy,
but now you are not,
because now you know me,
and that’s unfortunate.

I never meant,
to break your heart,
had no intentions,
right from the start.

I am your sunshine,
I am your rain,
better forget me,
I only bring pain.

I cannot let go,
of what’s in the past,
the past is my future,
those scars, they last.

I don’t want,
to cause you pain,
but I am the sunshine,
and I am the rain.

These are my demons,
and I am their game.

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  1. thespiritkeepers
    November 29, 2015 • 4:30 pm

    Well done. Only a suggestions to watch for your cadences

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    • prospermind
      November 29, 2015 • 4:43 pm

      Thank you very much!
      What do you mean exactly? Do you have a particular verse in mind? 😉

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      • thespiritkeepers
        November 29, 2015 • 4:47 pm

        Cadences are the flow of the rhyme. It is like a song. All your music flows except for these two stanzas which do not rhyme. Once you were happy,
        but now you are not,
        because now you know me,
        and that’s unfortunate.

        These are,
        my deamons,
        and I am,
        their game.

        –If it is meant not to rhyme then that is OK . It is that the cadences with everything else that rhymes is interupted a bit. Like I said if they are not meant to rhyme then they are not meant to rhyme. You can self destruct this message if you like.

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      • prospermind
        November 29, 2015 • 4:58 pm

        Ah, yes I was thinking you might mean those two verses. Yes, I intentionally threw in the “unfortunate” to interrupt the flow, to draw all the attention to the word itself. I imagined this as a slow, soulful song, when I wrote these lines.
        I’m glad you said something though, because the last verse isn’t supposed to be a 4-liner, it’s just supposed to be a 2-liner actually. And here the word “game” should end it all by rhyming with the word rain of the previous verse. Gotta fix that one real quick, I hadn’t noticed. 😉

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  2. thespiritkeepers
    November 29, 2015 • 5:05 pm

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  3. Marissa Bergen
    November 29, 2015 • 7:19 pm

    Oh, i’ve known people like this. Dangerous.

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  4. snakeshe
    November 30, 2015 • 3:20 am

    This describes me so perfectly right now. Thank you

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  5. Thedarkestraven
    November 30, 2015 • 5:41 am

    Love it!

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  6. Souldiergirl
    December 3, 2015 • 7:50 am

    You are stunning! I love this piece

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  8. izza ifzaal
    December 4, 2015 • 7:32 pm

    I know this curse . Well said :p

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  9. Eyes + Words
    December 7, 2015 • 8:18 pm

    Really enjoyed this, great job 🙂

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  10. Noirfifre
    January 4, 2016 • 3:38 pm

    You have the hook for a good song here. You never never know where it can go :).

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